Earthrise Rolling Haiku Collaboration 2024
Welcome to the world’s largest annual collaborative poem.
We usually take our cue from The United Nations Year Designation, but their theme for 2024 is Camelids, and we doubted we would find a sufficiently inspiring seed poem. We have chosen instead to respond to the latest extravaganza from the heavens, and to note that people have been doing this forever. Please add your poem(s) in the Reply Box below, ideally at dawn at your location, but any time that you are able. The timeline for this begins at 12:01 A.M. on April 17 at the International Date Line (which is why it seems to have started the day before, for many of us). Your poem(s) may respond to the “seed” poem:
僭上に月の欠るを目利哉senjô ni tsuki no kakeru wo mekiki kanaaudaciouslyhe critiquesthe eclipse— Kobayashi Issa, tr. David G. Lanoue
or to any of the posted poems, and you can even start a new thread. You may participate as often as you like. All we ask is that you respond to the theme at hand.
Enjoy!
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always a critic
the many shapes
of cheese
Alan Summers
In the twilight hours
He returns to ground, slowly
Hands the reigns to moon
fresh moon
the sins all safely
under a carpet
Alan Summers
a bird singing in the copse
not eclipsed
by traffic noise
dirty moon
is that drone damage
even up there?
Alan Summers
Hi Wendy,
I’ll join the Sunday brunch with –
eclipsed
with blackstrap molasses –
a stack of golden pancakes
a post-IHPD celebration at IHOP
Bon Appetit ? ?
Michael
hi michael,
sounds great!
you’re very fortunate to have an ihop that offers real blackstrap molasses in AL!
total eclipse breakfast
banana pancakes
with mole sauce
(always…home-made)
solar flare threads
comet’s tail
a sliver of light
the kettle lifted
from its ring
Alan Summers
Sulaimani Chai
a night beverage
for the morning
Alan Summers
NOTE:
Why is it called Sulaimani Tea? In Arabic, the name Sulaiman translates to ‘Man of peace’.
Hi Alan,
For this reader-writer this image
“the kettle lifted
from its ring”
appealed to me as a domestic reflection of post-eclipse
Thanks for sharing it,
Michael
total eclipse breakfast
chocolate batter spreads
on buckwheat pancakes
( after Alan’s “mooncake” )
the moon
cakes the sun –
black ice frosting
a celestial triune
birthing a galaxy
of stellar haiku
mooncakes
with Lapsang Souchong
a critic’s crescent smile
Alan Summers
she wears solar glasses
for a brief moment
…fireflies
up in the sky
sound of
love making
a brief distraction
from looming war
their love making
iron smelting
the Mars project
hugs both
Alan Summers
3 celestial bodies align IM for Man
IM = Instant Message
he said that
they said drones
blue moon
Alan Summers
she said this
they said safe passage
Neptune’s Nereid
Alan Summers
NOTE: Neptune’s Nereid has a strange orbit that lead astronomers to believe that the moon is a captured object from the Kuiper Belt, a region of icy bodies beyond Neptune, ranging from a trillion comet sized objects to those larger than 100 km in diameter–BBC Science Focus magazine.
moon across the sun
the fleeting prospect
of a ceasefire
day phenomenon
someone pointing a finger
from the moon
Alan Summers
solar eclipse . . .
showing off my strong side
solar eclipse showing off my strong side
reeds sway
darkness enfolds
the sun
the moon
in our fingertips
smouldering
into incense
Alan Summers
Alan, I experience a celestial sensorium in the digital microcosm:
visual
tactile
olfactory
This is what attracted the American Imagists to the haiku; then later the Beats, namely Kerouac –
Michael
celestial event
we gather
in the ring of light
moon shy
the longest journey
to another home
Alan Summers
Alan,
I really liked that “moon shy,”
giving me cause to hear
? moon shy on sunshine ?
Michael
veiled sun
a brief night
in broad daylight
Hi Nalini,
I like the brevity – one breath – and the rhythm & rhythm.
Even briefer without the unneeded article “a.”
Michael
morning commuters
many possibilities
a sliver of light
holding up the wedding
a flower girl’s sky
peculiar shade…
blackbirds yield their time
to the frogs
singing lullabies
to a German Shepherd
my first eclipse bite
a partial eclipse
caught in the palm of my hand
for once then something
with a bow to Robert Frost
when an ellipsis
becomes more and more
and less
blued out moon
haiku quatrain
(after Alan Summers)
both sides right
both sides wrong:
each eclipsing the other
both sides are right
both sides are wrong
news flash
Alan Summers
endless news chatter
killing the mystery
full eclipse
awakening
the darkness inside
full eclipse
when cardboard
is not quite enough
fractured moon
Alan Summers
across the ocean of space
the sun and moon
locked in a brief embrace
Melissa, Happy AM-after IHPD 2024
Yes, like the “2 ships in the night” passing in mid-day
Enjoyed your other kus, too ?
Michael
as the sky darkens
the sun’s purple petals
unfurl
over the pond
excitement
in blighty… a wee bite from the sun
she awakens mid-day
to another blackout —
total eclipse
cursor moon
she moves her finger
over the sun
solar eclipse
the pugilist’s
double shiner
Robert, Happy IHPD 2024
Thanks for finding & sharing “cursor moon” – brings hi-tech to haiku ?
Michael
Total eclipse
A child bride sobs
In her sleep
diamond ring
the moon
has a new lover
Vishal, Happy AM-after 2024,
Sharing a variation of yours
A diamond ring
around the sun & moon
engaged in a kiss
“Lovers forever / face to face” – Stevie Nicks, lyric from “Leather and Lace
Michael
cupping a lighter
for a dying mate’s cig –
solar eclipse
Stillness of moment
The shrill voice of darkness
Pierces the air
greet morning glory
& pray a daybrak’s shadow
won’t pack on me soon
the shrike under a lowering moon lines up
Alan Summers
monostich version of the haiku that appears in “The Nine Assassins”
Contemporary Haibun Online 20.1 (April 2024 issue) haibun editor: Rich Youmans
Mr. Summers, Happy IHPD 2024
Yes, yours is in best form as a one-liner.
When I searched “shrike,” I heard a rhyme, and found:
the brutal strike
from the impaler shrike –
a total eclipse
Thank you, Alan, for the prompt,
Michael
ooohs and aaahs
in the darkness
solar eclipse
toiling through
the dictionary
waning moon…
僭上に月の欠るを目利哉
— Kobayashi Issa
僭上 audacity; forwardness; effrontery; impertinence
に particle at (place, time); during
月 moon
の possessive
欠る (欠ける) to wane (of the moon); to go into eclipse
を (wo) particle to
目利 judgement, assessing
哉 kana how! what! exclamation mark (cutting word)
—-
what effrontery at the moon’s eclipse to judge it!
how dare one judge the moon for being eclipsed!
Alternatives?
Would ELH editors accept the verse today? I wonder….
(A total lunar eclipse was visible from Japan on October 3, 1819, coinciding with the time of the autumnal full moon, traditionally known as the Harvest Moon in Western cultures and the Tsukimi or “moon-viewing” festival moon in Japan – Google)
a teen
rolls his eyes
partial eclipse
moonrise
all the fancy words
eclipsed
Keith, Happy AM-after IHPD 2024
Why not the less wordy, and with this syntax:
what effrontery –
judging the moon’s eclipse!
my varying:
such effrontery –
questioning the moon eclipsing!
questioning the moon’s lunacy
when there is always method in the madness
never a mystery to me – Michael ?
You too.
Thing is, Issa’s put the cut at the end.
no one
a stranger
eclipse viewing
Marion, Happy AM-after IHPD 2024
Yes, the global unison resonates even after the stellar event
In UniSon under the same sun
Michael
Melatonin dose
the office workaholic
gets a time-out
NPM
eclipsed by
IHPD
A day carrying
the weight of a month –
haiku-like
eclipse . . .
my words during
mass
Ivan Gaćina
solar eclipse
. . . a stranger asks
if i speak English
cloud cover
another event
goes virtual
midday eclipse
she views through the dark
of chest x-ray
the moon’s shadow
sweeps across the prairie
to me
crescent sun
a Joshua Tree’s
upraised arms
(I happened to be in Joshua Tree National Park for the eclipse.)
finding ways
to hide my flaws
total eclipse
– Billy Antonio
Laoac, Philippines
total eclipse —
the temple’s glow cuts
through shadows
Nice!
after the eclipse
we see a bat zooming off
in search of true night
cloud cover a total eclipse of the sun
after the sun’s eclipse
our darkest thoughts
still dark
total eclipse –
still groping in the dark
my alter ego
you and I
no longer we –
eclipse
Natalia Kuznetsova
solar eclipse my trips around the sun limited
only through the eyes
of my grandkids . . .
the next solar eclipse
solar eclipse. . .
the cat continues
to groom
missed my chance
at eighty
eclipsed by time
Dear Mr. Kacian and The Haiku Foundation team,
Thank you for the opportunity to participate in the Earthrise Rolling Haiku Collaboration 2024.
Happy International Haiku Poetry Day (IHPD) to you and all poets! Best wishes.
*****
total tongue twister
twinning in tranquility—
totality tees
All Spring Kigo: tranquility, nodokasa 長閑さ
[Kigo from World Kigo Database]
*****
Sincerely,
Monica Kakkar (she/her/hers)
https://www.linkedin.com/in/monicakakkar/
Dear Mr. Kacian and The Haiku Foundation team,
Thank you for the opportunity to submit a published haiku with first publication credit, at the culmination of the Earthrise Rolling Haiku Collaboration 2024.
Happy International Haiku Poetry Day (IHPD) to you and all poets! Best wishes.
*****
midsummer bull’s eye
afloat in reflection pool—
a ring of fire
Mid-Summer Kigo: midsummer, seika 盛夏 (せいか)
[Kigo from World Kigo Database]
Prompt: Mr. Kobayashi Issa’s hokku: tooyama ga medama ni utsuru tombo kana
the distant mountains–
reflected in the eyes
of a dragonfly
Asahi Shimbun’s Asahi Haikuist Network, October 06, 2023
https://www.asahi.com/ajw/articles/15021145
*****
Sincerely,
Monica Kakkar (she/her/hers)
https://www.linkedin.com/in/monicakakkar/
solar eclipse –
noise of the waves
less loud
partial eclipse –
can I somehow settle
with myself
. . . nothing I can say
a total eclipse of the heart
‘Total Eclipse of the Heart’, writer: Jim Steinman, singer Bonnie Tyler, time – early ’80s
an aim for the waning of Jupiter’s Io love letters
Alan Summers
silent slide of the moon
dwarfs us in darkness
in darkness
a glimpse of hope
haiku across time-zones
?
total eclipse –
cicadas in the bay suddenly
fell silent
***
total eclipse –
cellphone flashlights walk
down the street
war shadows eclipsed by the moon
Nice response Stephen! Can’t resist my own to yours….
war even in darkness solar flares
“It is finished”
the sky weeps
rain drops on my windshield
a spider weaves
in full moon light
Judas dangles from a rope
Noon on the Hill of Skulls
the cross goes up
the sun is waning
winter nightfall
the eye doctor
holds my hand
how moving
After the eclipse, the moon moves on. And we too moving, lilacs blooming
moonless night
a cat’s shadow
lost in fog
brass bell: a haiku journal, December 2021
a black cat
shapes the night
oneness
Rip-Roaring haiku Edited by Corine Timmer bicadeideias publishing 2022
total eclipse –
suddenly my doubts
dissolve
Daniela Misso
Happy IHPD!
barn painted red
disappears in night light
this meeting
eclipsing his boss
office politics
under the pine
a Buddha covered in snow
weather turns
keeping the view with vetted solar filters
achieving aesthetic distance light-years away
star or satellite game show of the spheres
( I hear John Keats:
my brother’s voice
freed from the urn )
totally eclipsed –
the sun is experiencing
“negative capability”
totally eclipsed by the moon,
but the sun
does not change
total eclipse–
if only you could emerge
a better person
nature’s dimmer switch from home and away
partial eclipse
a neighbor recovering
from a heart attack
Happy IHPD, Richard,
A good time to be
not in totality
Michael
totality
looks like I missed
it again
Hahaha, and I have a typo on my own last name. ?
:-)
total eclipse
how to compare
what she holds within
first daffodil
edging out a crowded field –
solar eclipse
little black dress
proper for any
eclipse
CoCo Chanel
a woman beyond all seasons
Leon, Happy IHPD,
Michael
anticipating
darkness of solar eclipse
four minutes of night
shadow will never disguise
madness of men on the earth
midday is morphing into midnight
heat
on the old man’s lap
camel wool blanket
*
solar eclipse
the dragon devours the sun
in grandpa’s story
*
once upon a time
when darkness veiled the Earth…
the broken battle
*
darkness here
the other side of the moon
has a bright face
*
total eclipse
flowers in the garden
go to bed
Support equality.
All have the right to exist.
All worthy of love.
Thanks, Branwen, for the reminder here in this global community on IHPD
Amen
According to the Our Father
All Life Matters
Michael
flight to Nova Scotia
you might think this poem
is about you
Happy IHPD, kjmunro,
Am I hearing some Carly Simon here
“you probably think this song {eclipse} is about you”
with a haiku-hug,
Michael
the moon mounts
the face of the Sun
the earth is m o v e d
zone of totality
a young woman smiles at him
and offers her seat…
eclipsed
by the disease
her smile
glimpsing
a light
haiku for the day
❤️??
darkening
a stargazer’s moon
no longer there
coming round again perfect timing perfect ellipse
*
(no, not a typo)
Yes, it is not the ellipse that is eclipsed
Parfait!
Mark, Happy IHPD,
Michael
Merci!
the silent flight
of a raven …
solar eclipse
darkness at noon
my neighbor’s oak
eclipses the sun
like bridesmaids,
the stars in attendance
as Sun & Moon embrace face to face
total eclipse
one boy leans to another
— steals a kiss
I share these gothic lyrics by Stevie Nicks for the FM song “Sister of the Moon,” because I have observed the cadence of the personification soundtracks the Moon’s eclipsing of the Daystar, precisely:
” Intense silence
as she walked in the room.
Her black robes trailing,
Sister of the Moon. ”
My varying-
a quiet intensity gathering,
as her foot softly stepped into the room –
(does anyone know her name?)
Sister of the Moon!
Michael
http://www.amaze-cinquain.com/vol_2_no_1/virga.html
slice by slice
the moon eats away
at its source of light
Yes, Marjolein,
You have indeed aptly captured an image of
“biting the hand that feeds.”
Happy IHPD,
Michael
deep in the shadows
the umbraphiles
embrace
Jean,
Thanks for bringing
“umbraphiles’ in
out of the darkness
Happy IHPD,
Michael
let the child
hide you mom for a minute
eclipse
revolution
of the Galilean moon
he lies four-fold
tears for no reason the eclipse
eclipse shadow path
its tale rebounds around earth
the moon holding court
special food today
apples on a golden tray
it is haiku day
eclipse over
the long-windedness
of crows
solar eclipse
a cock’s call
once again
spring moon
the earthshine imperceptible
in its shadow
piercing light
a sliver
in my eye
Bird chatter
Fading into dusk
Moon shadow
eclipse day–
again I’m feeling
over-shadowed
Hi Terri French,
I like your haiku here, especially the
“over-shadowed” (over whelming)
Happy IHPD 2024,
Michael in Birmingham, AL USA
Thank you, Micheal.
in totality
eclipsed
by the son
eclipse an otter dives through a ring of fire
Presence, Number 46, October 2016
eclipsenso
Haiku Canada Review, Volume 11, Number 2, October 2017
Happy IHPD to all!
Debbie,
Thank you for sharing your dynamic performance haiku!
Happy IHPD,
Michael
solar eclipse –
stars twinkle
at totality
Valentina,
a varying following your to lead –
the stars twinkle
in attendance
at totality
Happy IHPD,
Michael
sky high
from light to dark shadows
eclipse I see
blackout—
the text redacted
to WOW
celebrating
the moment of totality —
a raised Corona
Cheers to IHPD 2024
Michael ?
the sky
plays three card monte
find the lady
eclipse totality
a blind girl hears
the coolness darkening
❤️
❤️
denuded
in our sights
the desert horizon
the news anchor
forgets his words
ring of fire
the eclipse
not visible here
~but I know darkness
eclipse . . .
the sun pretends to be
the moon
the backing vocals
of johnny cash –
six prisoners and the eclipse
no matter how big
the gap between us –
we stargaze as one
Yes, that Oneness under the same Sun
Happy IHPD
Michael ✝️
bad moon rising –
in our cellar a fish
in the mousetrap
a stampede
of giraffes
on-line eclipse
he clips
his second Corona
darkening sky
bailey’s beads
always an offer
she can’t refuse
daylight savings
the moon
plays her part
at the height
of the eclipse
his proposal
❤️
it is just
the way he is born —
solar eclipse
during the eclipse
a bumble bee lands
on my shirt
across
lake fiery
mother duck
Lily Dale eclipse
unbalanced energy seeks
a happy medium
partial eclipse
but the apotheosis
of Jobs’ logo
path of totality
all the ways we arrive
in sacred space
solar eclipse—
looking at the sun
through a cereal box
Julie,
Following your lead –
finding the eclipse
in a box
of Cracker Jacks
Happy IHPD
Michael
Haha great minds, Julie. I wrote one just like this! (Not for this though. It hasn’t-and won’t-be published).
eerie gasps
the moon pulls
a fast one
in the path
of totality
a new vision
Hi Sari,
a varying following your lead –
the path of totality leading to a new vision
Happy IHPD,
Michael
solar eclipse
nothing but the bleakness
of clouds
inside the rain-swept breeze a double rainbow
penumbra
an E-collar on my white cat
Jim-Jim Jimmy
one life less
the cat tries to shrug off
the diamond ring
penumbra
this need to know
the other
eclipse over
a gathering of jackdaws
resume their chatter
eclipse party
everyone looking
cool
senjô ni tsuki no kakeru wo mekiki kana
audaciously
he critiques
the eclipse
— Kobayashi Issa, tr. David G. Lanoue
.————————————————–
lost for words
at the eclipse
I light a butter lamp
swallowing
the eclipse whole
a butter lamp flickers
cold darkness
of the blue pines
morning of the eclipse
evening of the eclipse
the blue pines
edged with gold
no songs about
the man in the sun
solar eclipse
solar eclipse
a gathering
of clouds
plastic lenses
pointed at the sky
solar eclipse
dawn offering
at the hilltop shrine
ravens gather
eclipse dawn how still the prayer wheels
seeing the eclipse
in the news, on my handphone;
perhaps next time
Lea, varying after yours –
viewing the eclipse
second hand
on my iPhone
Happy IHPD
Michael
eclipse dawn
a lull
in the bird song
the lull with a bye
Brings a ?
Thank you MV
nature’s trick
our treat
solar eclipse
a little break
for the blooming irises
when the darkness lifts
my dog demands
another breakfast
Haha
forgetting his goggles
a dozen partial suns
with every blink
eclipse viewing
looking through the moon roof
to see the sun
moon cup her phased eclipse
sun and moon eclipse-sync
total eclipse-
to my balcony
confused bat lands
equations of chaos
the clouds and the rain
do not obey
dark passage
a trail of silence follows
the eclipse’s path
strange dusk
the garden awakens
bird by bird
surface tension
water-boatmen
sculling silence
autocracy
the dark shadow moving
across the sun
bated breath…
the growing fear that darkness
will prevail
so near yet so far —
missing the eclipse
by a mere continent
Interesting, Ben,
wrong continent at the right time
Happy IHPD,
Michael
heat of battle—
day turns to night,
silence pervades
new moon
overtaking the sun–
two-flowered Cynthia
partial eclipse —
the mockingbird
looks for a mate
darkness covers me
and yet I am so happy-
the solar eclipse
solar eclipse —
that night the moon’s
curtain call
Sweet grass, lilac breeze,
petals fall to manic chirps,
harbingers of sneeze